Good stuff so far. Some very interesting choices for pairings so far, merged with very hot sex scenes make for a must read story. I'm looking forward to future chapters.
I have no idea why this fic has only eight reviews. It's incredibly good!
For starters, you matched a lot of different heroes I never thought would sleep together, and I loved it (just too bad Dazzler never really got her share!). I am a fan of Marvel, so while the fic stayed within the Marvel Universe's boudnaries it was Top 5 to me! When DC came along, it wasnt a big hit, but all those other guests make the story very hard to keep up, and hard to stick to one favorite character!
Aside from that, I simply love how you describe sex scenes. I think you are the best writer around these parts when it comes to straight-out fucking, from what they do to the words you use. One scene stands out, from Illyana's buttstuffing. That made me 'Wow...". It was simply incredible, from how she thought about it (mindset), the tidbits of background we got from her (backstory) and the actual fucking, you had all my favorite things there! I cannot stress this enough, it was mindblowing perfect.
I would love to persuade you into trying an off-shot series focusing on some X-Men/Marvel Heroes! I could even illustrate them.
I just finished reading your 30 chapters. I am quite fond of the story but am uncertain as to whether its good or great. There's a very obvious ebb and flow to your story: sex in which many bisexual women and upwards of two men perform 69s and receive anal sex, ungodly amounts of exposition, short bursts of action, celebratory sex, wash rinse repeat. It works but it's obvious in its use.
You describe well, vividly. I am quite impressed when you take the time to set the stage. Something I always gloss over in my own writing. Bravo.
You use so many characters I love (Spider-woman and Zatanna being my personal favorites [I have Thor's tastes]). The inclusion of the Chrono Trigger girls was a personal bright point. Additionally, I love the way you integrated the worlds together. I was quite impressed by the way Thunderans were implemented. ShinRa and AVALANCHE entered the story well (The relations to Thor and Mr Fantastic was great) but I found Baretta and Sephia Roth off putting. Not the shemale nature but the decision to have the shemale nature, I suppose.
One thing I'd like to commend you for is the name alterations of some characters. Carol Ferris to Ferra is the most obvious choice. The name changed but you didn't immediately drop the way you had been describing she and Danvers, allowing for a slow and complete integration. One question I have is why Marle became Mari? It's not as if there was another Marle in competition.
Anyway, I enjoyed the read. Please continue to write and I shall continue to read.
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